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Good day.
I would appreciate if you give me your comments and suggestions of my work please.
I would like to know what aspects could be improved.
Thank you very much to all

Published date : 12 days ago

Updated date : 5 days ago

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  • 12 days ago
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  • 12 days ago
    Test 2
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  • Not applicable
    12 days ago
    Polite work is good.

    In general, I can't feel the power.
    The sword-like thing on the back is not in line with the forward leaning posture of the body.
    Thunder god drum on the back? is significant for eight pieces. It is unnatural that there is no shadow.
    The "upper body" of the right hand leaf is shorter and poorer than the "stem". The vasea is not drawn.
    My left arm is halfway in the direction. Put it more on the outside of the silhouette.
    The frontal drip of the armor is not visible along the body solid.
    If the face mimics a tengu, the nose is small.
    The arm ratio aura is increased to about 3 times, and it looks better.
    The sole tsuppari does not look powerful.
    A half bird's eye view.

    For example, it is a selfish opinion. Do not worry.
    • Japanese

  • 12 days ago
    It looks good, don't worry.
    I think that even Japanese Western-style fantasy things have proof mistakes that make you laugh when you see balamcomic.
    It's like each other, it's good if it looks good.

    On top of that, if the proof is more accurate, I think that there will be more chances for the viewer to think, "Oh, it's neat. It's good!"
    -The position of the sword on the waist is reversed. Is it correct if you are left-handed?
    ・ The way to insert the waist sword is upside down. The way to equip a sword in Japan is that the Japanese sword has the blade on the top and the sword on the bottom.
    ・ It is regrettable that it is difficult to distinguish whether the taiko emblem on the back is a three-way or a sword character.

    That's why I will put a link that will be helpful. Since there is only Japanese, please use the translation function of your browser.

    Sword model and brush
    https://assets.clip-studio.com/es-es/search?word=%E5%88%80&type=brush%2Cother_3dmodel%2C3dmodel&order=dl

    Articles on sword poses and correct mounting diagrams
    https://www.clipstudio.net/oekaki/archives/151803

    Image search for Raijin's drums
    https://www.google.co.jp/search?q=%E5%A4%AA%E9%BC%93%E3%80%80%E9%9B%B7%E7%A5%9E&tbm=isch&ved=2ahUKEwiM58qyxbP0AhUIxGEKHXkEBq0Q2 -cCegQIABAA & oq =% E5% A4% AA% E9% BC% 93% E3% 80% 80% E9% 9B% B7% E7% A5% 9E & gs_lcp = CgNpbWcQAzIFCAAQgAQyBggAEAgQHjIGCAAQCBAeOgsIABCABBCxAxCxAzoFCAAQsQM6BwgAEIAEEAQ6BggAEAQQGFCZUFiGYGD_ZWgAcAB4AIABhAGIAaQIkgEDNC42mAEAoAEBqgELZ3dzLXdpei1pbWfAAQE & sclient = img & ei = NIWfYYz9N4iIhwP5iJjoCg & bih = 869 & biw = 1463

    A list of designs showing a family line called a family crest
    https://www.rakuten.ne.jp/gold/hina-ishikura/kamonichiran.html
    http://www.morisige.com/html/hina/tabi/japanese/kamon-hyou-top.html


    After that, I want you to use it as a material, so if there is a search word "What is this?"
    I think that there are people who can post links to any number of materials related to Japan, so please use them conveniently.
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  • 11 days ago
    I think the line drawing is also polite and the depiction is fine and cool!
    If there is a shadow of a person and a little more aura (effect) with a terrifying feeling,
    I think it will be more powerful.
    I added a little color adjustment, shadows, and terrifying effects. (('ω'o) ┓

    <Part of interest>
    ・ I was worried that the tip of the sword was bent sharply.
    It feels like it's bent, and it's easy to connect to the image of a weak sword.
    It may be better to express it a little more smoothly.

    ・ Because the red color of the drum-like part of the Raijin in the background is vivid
    It was more noticeable than the purple color around the person's face, and I felt that the gaze guidance was regrettable.
    • Japanese

  • 11 days ago
    Supplement.
    I had the impression that the drum part of Raijin on the left side of the screen was not parallel to the position on the right side.
    Since the person is tilted to the right toward the screen, it seems that it is less likely to cause discomfort if it is aligned with that direction.
    The depth is a little different from the previous one, so
    If you want to get a sense of depth, you may want to adjust the arrangement of the left and right drums.
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  • 11 days ago
    It is a correction. The person was "tilting to the left" instead of leaning to the right when facing the screen. (('o' ;) ┓
    • Japanese

  • 11 days ago
    Perhaps the direction in which the person is facing, the inclination of the ring behind, and the size and arrangement of the drums do not match a little.
    I think I'm sitting down a little and my left foot is in front of the screen.
    The right foot appears to be slightly floating as the right foot appears to open outward toward the screen.
    It seemed a little difficult to tell which direction the center of gravity was facing.

    If you move your right foot back a little and pull it back, it will look more natural.
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  • Not applicable
    11 days ago
    From Minato's comment
    > I think I'm sitting down a little and my left foot is in front of the screen.

    It seems to me that "the legs are stretched out and the fighting spirit is lost, and the legs are backed up and cornered, and they are frightened and ready."
    • Japanese

  • 11 days ago
    There is a terrifying aura (effect) around the character's face and arms, so
    It seemed like I was holding a sword to save my strength and use my technique.
    I didn't feel like I was losing my fighting spirit.

    What kind of situation is balamcomic with this character?
    Since it is not specified, I think that you can imagine various things if you look at it.
    • Japanese

  • 11 days ago
    In the composition of the image attached to the question column by balamcomic (with the character tilted),
    I don't know if I drew it from the beginning,
    If you change the angle and adjust it toward the front, it may be easier to see where the balance feels strange.
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  • 11 days ago
    Thank you all very much for your advice.
    I will keep them in mind.
    With all my heart thank you 🙏 ❤
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